Post by .Greyducky. on Mar 27, 2013 16:48:07 GMT -5
Mar 27, 2013 15:11:01 GMT -5 @aspen said:
Name: Aspenkit, paw, <heart>Appearance: Aspenheart is a small, light tan she-cat, with silver to white markings. Her ice are a deep green. Long furred.
Size: She's about 7 inches, and 8 pounds..
Personality: Aspenheart's a nice, lovable, caring, helpful, and trustworthy she-cat. Can be harsh if needed, but is almost rarely. Tiny bit hostile.
History: Aspenheart was born in the soft nursery on StreamClan, the daughter of Mistyheart and Coalstripe. The she-cat had 3 sisters and 1 brother, Harekit, Rainkit, Ashkit and Ravenkit. Ashkit died about a day after his birth, after a rogue raided the camp for fresh-kill.
After being named apprentice, Aspenpaw came to a near death experience when having a quarrel with some foxes.
When being named warrior, she became a bit more hostile after having to fight one of the senior warriors. The reason was unknown of why she had to fight, it seemed Breezefur was so nice..
(I might add more, Im kind of braindead right at the moment xD)
Nice, just a few changes need to be made~
For starters, "Misty-" isn't traditional (even though Mistyfoot is a character later in the books). "Mist-" works, though. "Coal-" also doesn't work, and isn't a substance the cats would not know (at least not Streamclan as far as we are from the town). Breeze- doesn't work because of another long explanation. Our traditional naming rule thread details what is and is not allowed and has links to very comprehensive lists. Thank you for your patience on this! We are determined to be like the first arc of the book series when it comes to traditionalism. ^.^
Another thing, bwah I'm sorry to be so nit-picky, but I'm trying to keep instances that would effect the whole clan consistent. So if you want an event like a rogue invading the fresh-kill pile then you'll need to ask me first. I'm going to say no on this because the rogues are so much closer to Moorclan that it doesn't really make sense. Illnesses can easily take a kit, though, so maybe just go with the less over-dramatic death of a cold? A fox attack is a little closer to the events in the history, since we have had foxes on the border of Streamclan, but an apprentice wouldn't be able to fit several and survive. Actually, at the moment it is only one fox. Even then an apprentice would not of survived on her own. Maybe make it part of a patrol? Or she just ran away before anything could happen? Big events that can be used in bios are included in the Streamclan history thread, but they need to line up perfectly age-wise.
The idea of a tan she-cat with white markings sounds pretty, but I've never seen a cat like that in real life. If you could find me an unedited photo of one I might change my mind on this, otherwise her appearance needs to change. ;_;
I'd also like to know What the senior warrior did that she would have to fight over? If it was a verbal fight, or a not too serious physical fight then that's fine. If the senior warrior did something, though, that would effect the clan or that Applestar would not approve of then I need to know to give permission on that. These characters are being accepted into a well-oiled functioning clan and need to fit into it. Anything that wouldn't make sense might cause problems.
I'm sorry if this sounds super harsh, and I really didn't mean it to, but we are pretty darn strict on realism. Our rules may seem tough, but in the end they'll lead to an easier rp for everyone. This is a group thing and it takes every member participating to make it work flawlessly. Thank you sosoosososo so much for your patience and understanding! I'm terribly sorry for the inconvenience. ;_;